Posts Tagged ‘Essay 5’

A strong Douglass essay

August 3, 2008

Arthur agreed to let me share his Essay 5, a remarkably thoughtful investigation into Douglass’s use of rhetoric. The key to Arthur’s success is that he always explains why Douglass uses the rhetorical ornaments he chooses: every ornament connects back to one of Douglass’s goals for the text. Look, for example, at his discussion of chiasmus in paragraph 3: he connects the moral inversion Douglass describes to the rhetorical inversion of his language.

Defining Slavery

In the last paragraph on page 10 in Narrative of the Life of Frederick Douglass, we see how Douglass is able to use mechanical ornaments to divulge a greater purpose. His use of these rhetorical tools, along with contrasting as well as emotionally sensitive imagery, is a call to the morality and sensibility of man.

One of Douglass’s main goals in the book is to show case the barbarity of slavery, and he accomplishes that in several different ways. In his first example, he shows his readers the lack of significance of the slave, in regard to the master. To emphasize the situation, he starts off with an inversion of the sentence, their sole work was to attend to this establishment; in Douglass’s version “to attend to this establishment” precedes the subject, highlighting the value of the work over the slave. Douglass inserts this sentence as an assessment, but the master himself has his own metric of relevance. By Colonel Lloyd’s measure, his horse is several times more important than a slave. The image of the horse produces the same effect as Douglass’s sentence inversion, by showing the extent at which the slave master will go to punish the old and young Barney on the horse’s behalf.

Douglass’s next step in making his case is an appeal to his own trustworthiness. He lets the intended audience, Caucasians, know that he isn’t just going to give some false account. He acknowledges the fact that sometimes the Barneys deserved to be whipped but got away with their misdeeds. This is paradoxical to Douglass’s epiphany that no man should have such power over another; that’s why we find the sentence in a chiasmus, “they were frequently whipped when least deserving and escaped whipping when most deserving it.” Douglass gives the sense that his testimony is not going to leave out any important aspects even the ones that don’t favor his own people; however by putting the barbarous part first it serves the dual role of introducing the lose-lose situation that a slave constantly finds himself in.

To describe this perplexing state of affairs, Douglass uses a hypotactic sentence with conduplicatio followed by an isocolon. He repeats the phrase “too…or too,” for instance “his food was too wet or too dry,”  to illustrate how the slave is in no position to actually do what has master wants him to do; it is completely left to chance. Douglas drives the point home with the isocolon before ending the sentence. He says, “…he had too much hay, and not enough of grain; or he had too much grain and not enough of hay”; by using this along with the conduplicatio he stresses the slave’s struggle to do anything right in the eyes of his master. He concludes the thought with yet another inversion, “the slave must answer never a word,” symbolizing the hopeless condition of the slave.

Douglass knows that the power of his prose is nothing without an appeal to the emotions of the human spirit. He relies a lot more on imagery for this portion of his argument. In this paragraph Douglas refers to the old and the young Barney in the beginning, but then he focuses only on the senior. Sadly, the feelings that the image of an elderly man provokes, is more powerful than the image of some young adult.  The effictio of old Barney’s “bald head” and “toil-worn shoulders,” followed by the number of lashes Douglass tells us old Barney has received up to at a time, is heart wrenching; we see the same kind of attempt when Douglass talks about his grandmother. If we link this image to the image of how well the horse is treated, we see the brunt of Douglass’s claim that slavery is savagely crude.

The effictio of Barney plays a key role in the ethopoeia of Colonel Lloyd who in this passage personifies slavery. By describing Colonel Lloyd’s treatment of the old and young Barney, Douglass is directly attacking his ex-master’s character; at the same time Douglass is attacking the institution as a whole. At the end of the passage Douglass informs us that it’s not just Colonel Lloyd but it’s his sons and sons-in-laws too; it’s not just the Barneys being dehumanized either, but the coach driver William Wilkes as well. In essence the passage is an ethopoeia of slavery itself.

In conclusion, the rhetorical elements in the passage allow Douglass to characterize slavery in an educated but plain way. The barrage of mechanical ornaments in some ways represents the numerous methods in which people like Douglass had to combat slavery. This paragraph’s use of the imagery to pounce on the book’s loudest theme, that slavery is out right wrong, is a goal that Douglass not only accomplishes here, but in the novel as a whole.

Thank you, Arthur!

Some good news about Essay 5

August 3, 2008

The mean scores for Essay 5 are the second-highest of the summer, bested only by the scores for Essay 1 (which I graded the most generously).

Problem #1: Summary

The most significant problem in Essay 5 was a tendency to shy away from analysis and to lean toward summary. For example, if you were to argue

Douglass’s besting of Covey in physical conflict represents Douglass’s decision not to be physically abused.

I would have commented

Douglass himself explains that this is the significance of this episode. How do the symbols or rhetoric of this passage reveal a second layer of meaning here?

(Well, I would have scrawled something rather less clear, but you get the idea.)

In ILS 121, analysis is king. This means that any argument that doesn’t peel away the surface of the text and expose some hidden meaning that lies beneath isn’t quite what we are looking for.

Here are two rules to keep in mind as you prepare for your oral presentation tomorrow and your final exam essays on Tuesday and Wednesday:

  • Analysis is the deduction of a general theory from a specific dataset, or, less commonly, the application of a general theory to a specific dataset
  • We don’t grade what you know; we grade how you think (I suspect this rule doesn’t apply in many courses outside the humanities)

Problem #2: Taking the easy way

Even if the mean grade for Essay 4 is only the second-highest, the median grade is far and away the highest of the summer—by a difference of 2.5 points, in fact. This means that, for the first time, a plurality of students earned a B. (Every earlier median was a BC.)

What distinguishes a B essay from an AB essay? It takes the easy way out.

An essay that perfectly satisfied all the parts of the essay question through thoughtful analysis of theme, image, and rhetoric earned that B, minus a few points for errors covered by the 44 Reminders. (Most frequent error: apostrophe use, #41.)

Essays that broke the 43-point wall drilled deeply into the text, its imagery, its contexts, and its language. Later tonight I will post an exemplary essay that did all of this.

What a strong edited essay looks like

July 30, 2008

After I posted Kelly Kuschel’s first essay, below, he emailed me to let me know that that essay was actually his first draft. He offered to let me post his final draft for that essay to set the record straight and to model the revision process—something you should be going through on your own with Essay 5, since you won’t be submitting a draft to me.

Here is the second draft of Kelly’s essay:

Master of Words

In the excerpt from Through the Looking-Glass, Alice and Humpty Dumpty debate over the method for which words meanings are assigned. Alice states that one can not merely give new meanings, while Humpty Dumpty argues that we are the masters of language, and thus can do whatever we please. Though Mr. Dumpty has a point, the consequences of his position far outweigh the benefits. On the other hand Alice’s view is not without faults.

Humpty himself states the problem to his own rational of assigning meanings to words when Alice says “I don’t know what you mean by ‘glory,’” and he responds “of course you don’t – till I tell you.” If people continuously add new and diverse meanings to words, with time, everyone would become incomprehensible. Though it might be true that “a rose by any other name would smell as sweet” (Shakespeare in Romeo and Juliet), naming it something else would only lead to unnecessary confusion. Humpty is using the same form of reasoning as Shakespeare (though in a less romantic way).

As for the flaw in Alice’s argument, it is not nearly as grave. She says people can not make new meanings for words. Language however, is like a living creature and with time evolution is necessary for the language to survive. If there were no changes the language would become irrelevant and die. There are a plethora of words in our common diction that have only developed within the last 100 years, and the language has had to change in order to accommodate them. Language allows you to think and express ones feelings; with fewer and less flexible words, our minds become less flexible and less able to think, and thus less able to express itself (as shown in 1984 by Orwell). It is important to be able to modify words as long as there is a consensus as to the final new meaning.

There is thus a necessary point of compromise. One single person can not change the meaning of word without creating confusion, but language must change in order to accommodate the needs of modern day life and further our ways of communicating our thoughts in a precise way. If enough people use a word for enough time and in a diverse set of locations (meaning the word is not merely a local phenomena but wide spread) the word should then be considered a true word and put into the dictionary. Allowing this to occur would create a balance between who is master: the authority or the person. People would be able to freely express themselves, while still not confusing their counterparts through the use of unaccepted meanings and definitions of a word.

Humpty and Alice both have valid points, and certain logic behind what they are debating. If push came to shove I would have to side with Alice because though with enough time your thoughts are constrained, Humpty’s path leads to anarchy. Luckily enough for us we don’t live in a world of black and white, and a compromise can be made that takes into account the faults and benefits of both positions.

(Edited 6/16/09: corrected misspelling of Kelly’s name. Sorry, Kelly!)

Connecting discussion to Essay 5

July 29, 2008

I should have connected the work we did in discussion today with the work I hope you will do when you write Essay 5; here is what I meant to say:

  • Our analysis of Douglass’s use of the word “master” on 30-31, and his note on 32 that slaves never called Captain Auld “master,” is an example of reading imagery in a passage of the Narrative, along the lines of topic #3. If you work on an image like this, I urge you to download the electronic text of the Narrative so you can count how often a certain word appears, and so you can find the passage where its appearance is most common.*
  • Our analysis of the passage on 33 of the quotation of Luke 12:47—and especially our reading of physical violence as related to lingual violence—is a good example of topic #2, in which a paragraph of the text reveals the thematic meaning of the text as a whole.
  • Our brief analysis of Captain Anthony’s language at the bottom of 4—”I’ll learn you how to disobey”—is an example of a bit of rhetorical analysis, along the lines of topic #1. What we didn’t take the time to do was to compare Anthony’s language in that paragraph to Douglass’s own: how does Douglass contrast the slave-beater’s language to the more delicate rhetoric of his own?

* If you can write an essay explaining why Douglass uses the word “very” with the frequency that he does, I will be very grateful; I have never reached a satisfactory conclusion as to why it appears on almost every page.

The Columbian Orator

July 28, 2008

The 7 parts of a Ciceronian oration

July 28, 2008

Here is the arrangement of a Ciceronian oration as Larry described it in lecture today—the Latin terms link to definitions from the Silva Rhetoricae, a handbook of rhetoric compiled by Gideon Burton of Brigham Young University:

  1. Entrance (exordium)
  2. Narration (narratio)
  3. Exposition and definition (partitio)
  4. Proposition (propositio)
  5. Confirmation (confirmatio)
  6. Confutation and refutation (refutatio)
  7. Conclusion or epilogue (peroratio)